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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again! Back for some more of Albus and Alexa!

One thing I noticed almost right away is that I've missed reading this story from Lexi's point of view. It's different from Al's, funnier in most ways. I know the strict alternating back and forth from chapter to chapter won't work all the time, but switching perspectives does keep things fresh and interesting.

It seemed a little strange that they were both more nervous about telling their friends than the were about the appointment. I've never been in their exact situation, but it seems like it would be a load off of their minds to finally stop hiding the truth from their closest friends. Still, your mind has a way of building things up. And I guess every new experience with pregnancy is a capital b Big capital e Experience when you're 18 and scared.

Albus is really sweet and considerate. I'm glad that Lexi realizes that. A lot of young women in her situation get way too self-absorbed to realize how hard people are trying to support them. He even does the dishes!

I love the little story about Albus holding his breath until he passed out. It fits just about perfectly with the way that you've built up his character. He's neurotic to the bone. You know, I don't think I had picked up on the fact that Emmett is gay until just now. Maybe you hinted at it earlier -- heck, maybe you came right out and said it and I totally missed it somehow -- but it makes sense now that I think about it.

I really like Healer Moore. She's really down to earth and relatable for an OB/GYN. She seems to be able to turn the professional detachment off and on as it's needed.

Ha! After all the agonizing over what to say, Lexi just blurts it out. And to say that their friends are nonplussed is putting it rather mildly. Emmett's rationale is actually pretty flawless if you think about it. Al and Lexi have certainly been doing things that young, expecting couples do. Well, provided their parents have enough cash lying around to buy a house.

So I'm feeling a sneaking suspicion that Emmett's new boyfriend might be somebody we already know. Is there a chance that the "older brother" isn't actually a brother? That's all I'm asking. ;)

One small thing before I go on here. At some point, the group definitely left the restaurant. It might be helpful if you threw in a quick reference to their departure, either before or after the section break.

The conversation among the girls at the end of the chapter was heart-warming. It's good to see that Al and Lexi have such good friends, people who are going to stand by them through this difficult experience.

One last thing: unless you're applying some cutting-edge logical terminology here, I think you meant to as "irrational" instead of "arrational".

This was definitely a slower chapter, but it was interesting and I felt like I learned a lot about Al and Lexi's friends. Congratulations on getting up to 700 reviews!

Author's Response: Hey again.

yes, as soon as I started this chapter, I realized that I missed writing Lexi. Strange because I tend to think I'm really bad at writing female POV, but I did.

They were the most nervous about their reactions. They wanted to tell, they wanted the load off their minds, they just didn't want their friends to freak. That's what worried them the most.

I'm glad you like the characters, especially my OCs. And, yeah, she just says it - she just keeps doing that. :P Emmett is picky about the details, he sees everything (as you know from later chapters). And Theo can buy a house, Harry and Ginny have enough to be comfortable, plus Albus saved, and they all added it together. But, yay, they have a house and they really should have known Emmett enough to guess something. ;)

...He's someone you know. ;)

Thank you so much for leaving a review, I'll definitely be going back and reading it through. :D

Sam.


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