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Review:EverDiggory says:
This was beautiful. It really was. And to think you wrote something so breathtaking in 500 words!

I liked the idea of the never-ending circle that was just about tearing Gia to shreds. It was heartbreaking! Thankfully, you described it in a way that left it beautiful and not cheesy. Because of the way you wrote it I definitely do not think it was too dramatic. You definitely approached this plot with good taste so it kept this story believable and not cheesy.

This is an interesting read! You covered so much raw hurt, pain and even frustration in 500 words! That is quite the feat! I loved that she was determined that the circle had to end, it had to stop, but then he comes back. And the cycle of pain continues. The last line is really important, and you handled it really well!

The only errors that really stood out to me was:

'When her thirst was clenched'

'But now, she died a tiny bit inside knowing that he had ever loved her.'

I think you meant quenched? And as for the second one at first I thought you meant never rather than ever but I suppose both really would fit. So the second one is only a possible typo?

I'm thoroughly impressed! Also, I apologize for the length of this review but I've noticed my reviews get shorter when the chapters do!

xx

Ever

Author's Response: Aaah, well spotted on the two mistakes. I must have read it so many times that I'm immune to noticing my silly typos. :/.
This (not at all long and very much appreciated) review really made me smile so thank you :D.

Also, thanks for abating my worries over this one-shot. It took me a long time to post it because sometimes I'd read it and feel that it was slightly ridiculous and way too dramatic and other times I'd read it and just not be sure so your opinion really means a lot.

peanuts11 xx

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