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Review:shadowycorner says:
Hello again!

I liked this chapter as it was a nice introduction to Helena's character. I really like the way you write her so far. She really fits into the era, represents a young lady of her status, and also has those streaks that we love about heroins from these times. I love that you didn't overdo it, though, making her a total rebel, refusing marriage. You did it very realistically but managed to add something interesting to her character. She wants to marry and to be happy, but she's independent enough to know what and who she wants. It's very attractive about her.

You're doing a marvelous job about capturing the language and atmosphere of that time. It sounds so authentic and lovely. Some years ago, I used to read historical novels all the time. I was so affected that I used formal dialogues like this even in normal fanfiction and it ended up sounding very awkward, lol, but here it's very fitting. :) The descriptions are also amazing. I don't feel like there's a narrator telling me this, but I feel like I'm actually there, standing in the room and watching Helena flip through all those old books. Or I could imagine the ride to the market and it was all very nice. Thank you for that fresh treat!

You have a great story here, I'll definitely read more. :)

Liz

Author's Response: Hi Liz! Thank you for coming by again!

Oh, I'm so glad you like Helena! I've gotten a few quibbles, most of which are actually directed at Rowena, where people seem to struggle with balancing the traditional sentiment toward women in this era and the more progressive attitude you might expect from a witch in a position of power. With both of the Ravenclaw women, I really tried to stick to those traditional expectations while adding that flair that you mentioned to make them more interesting. I don't think wanting to be independent and wanting to fall in love need to be mutually exclusive at all, and I think Helena is my little embodiment of that :)

It's great to hear that you like the language, too, and the imagery. I used to struggle a lot with making imagery too forced or deliberate, and now I'm working hard to try to make it fit in more and not let it take over the story.

Thank you for another lovely review :)

Amanda


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