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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! Iím finally here!! Sorry about the insane wait *ninja eyes*

I really love Edieís thoughts regarding Lisa. Especially that, though she seems jealous of the attention her friend gets, she doesnít seem to blame her in the slightest. And Lisa isnít doing it purposefully, showing up in a half see through blouse or anything. The fact that it upset Edie that she doesnít get that sort of attention around Lisa and that she does things like bewitching her engagement ring (HAHA!) shows that sheís completely human but still a good friend.

Oh my gosh, the part about her amplifying her voice to let the woman across the bar know that a certain body part fell out, AWESOME. You have no idea how many times Iíve wanted to call someone out for their dress being low enough that it could/did happen. I literally LOLíd at that point.

And the part about her picking up on subtle hints, hahaha. Have I mentioned how much I really love Edieís dry/sarcastic sense of humor??

Random note and personal opinion. I think you should up the bar tab. Eight Galleons, two Sickles, seventeen Knuts. is about eighty five dollars, and that would probably have gotten them each three drinks (assuming heís buying for five). And cheap drinks, not fancy cocktails. This doesnít have anything at all to do with your story, obviously, I just think more in the hundreds would have worked to further show his preposterous spending :P.

Ahhh I momentarily forgot this was going to be an Oliver/OC and was rooting for Krum and Edie! Haha, ooops! I really donít think I could do what Edie has agreed to with Rose. I wouldnít be able to stand my work being under someone elseís name, especially if it ends up being well liked!

And we will soon meet the mysterous Oliver! Awesome!

This chapter was incredibly amusing and went even further to show that, despite Edie having such an energetic personality, the girl works her dang butt off! She also really isnít living the dream life it seems like she may have oped. BUT she has two steady jobs, good guy friends and an awesome best friend, people that care about her, and sheís soon to have a hunky romance ;)

I really enjoyed this chapter, mídear!!

Jami

Author's Response: Yay, yay, yay! What wonderful reviews you leave. I don't care how long the wait is, they're always so lovely :)

I am constantly nervous while writing the friendship between Edie and Lisa, because I want it to be believable and I was really trying to avoid the stock-character best friend who is sweet and compliant, because sometimes it feels like they're just there to be there, or so that the main OC can have a friend, and aren't actually contributing to the story.

And thanks for the note on the price of the bar tab! I actually worked it out to be $80 ;) But it was meant to be his bar tab alone. So I need to make it clearer that it was just for his drinks--thanks for your suggestion!

I am so very glad that you liked this chapter. Your writing is always amazing, so your opinion is certainly valuable :) Thanks again times a zillion!


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