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Review:soufflegirl99 says:
Here for the November Review Swap for Gryffindor!! :D

Firstly, I thought the way the war affected him was extremely realistic, and you really developed his character, showing his soft side that we haven't seen before, but you wrote it with a touch of harshness that made it still believable - anymore description or love emotions and it would've been cheesy and unrealistic.

I love the way Astoria flirts with him, and he's taken by her, but I think you could've made him resist a tiny bit more, be a bit more defiant towards falling in love at first. When it says "The concern in her eyes snapped him out of it" you could've builded a bit more on it, just a sentence of how he tried to regain composure or something, because I don't think Malfoy would willingly let someone help him that easily, even if he was drunk - I think you did reflect that well but just a tiny bit more would really get the idea across.

The way the touch of her hand and the repetition playing across his mind is brilliantly done - absolutely perfect like he's savouring the moments in his darkened life. In addition to that, you fed the guilt and horror with his past well in to this story, creating the perfect balance of remorse through drinking and trying to forget by it.

The description and detail is to be admired greatly, "It filled the irregular, empty spaces between the pain and resentment that defined his daily life." I thought that summed up what his life would be like amazingly well, very believable and really sets the scene.

Overall, I cannot easily find faults with this chapter, the whole idea is completely original and not overdone with soppy romance. It has you gripped from start to finish with outstanding emotion and detail weaved in to this piece. The chapter title is very clever and a fab play on words. Absolutely awesome! :)

Author's Response: Hi, there! Thanks for stopping by!

I've always felt like the war took a lot of the malice and arrogance out of Draco, because he had a front-row seat for so many terrible things when Voldemort took over Malfoy Manor. That said, he's still Draco Malfoy, and he was raised to believe in certain things. Starting with book 6, he became a very complex character to me and I simply can't abide fics where he's portrayed as either a one-dimensional villain or a glowing story of redemption. Neither does his character justice.

In my mind, Draco's life was at such a low point when Astoria walked into it that there wasn't much fight left in him. He was drunk and he'd just finished being thrown out of two bars and throwing up in Knockturn Alley. She must have seemed like a gift from the gods. but perhaps it is a bit abrupt. I'll think on it.

I really tried hard to emphasize the impact she had on his emotional state, which wasn't good at the time. I think her presence, the physical feelings of her touching his hand and the way she makes him feel all would have taken on a very heightened importance to him.

I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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