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Review:GirlOnTheSidelines says:
Why hello... again!

So I read this yesterday right after leaving a review for the previous chapter but I'm back to review it now. Because, you know, you're amazing. And so it this freaking story.

So the kiss (or kisses) at the beginning. Are you trying to torture me? They were amazing. You write kisses so well! I loved how she was struggling with herself because it was clear that while her head was saying one thing, her body (and maybe her heart?) were saying another. It was so good!

And he did miss her. No matter what he says. You don't give daises to a girl you didn't miss. And I loved the image of him throwing rocks at her window, I'm not sure why but it made me laugh.

The uncomfortable bits were funny to read too, even if some of them made me cringe inside. The way he sometimes looked at her serves her right for wearing such skimpy clothing. I'm really curious about what's going on with his parents now, I hope you tell us soon... ish. Please. And also, what is happening at Hogwarts this year!? (Might it have something to do with the Quidditch Royale from the last version?) So excited.

And that ending. You're just being mean. That's two chapters in a row you've ended on a kiss. You really are trying to torture us. I love how much Ben wanted that kiss though. But I suppose he is just a teenage boy...

Thanks for the amazing read and I can't wait for more,

GirlOnTheSidelines x

Author's Response: What's this? GTS?! Hello! :D

I'm glad that you read this so quickly and came back to give me such a nice and thrilling review! You're so nice to this old bird!
The kisses. You have no idea how much I blushed and squirmed while writing them because I get so embarrassed just typing the word! I'm glad that they came out okay though because I was really worried! And yes of course I'm trying to torture you. This is the same person that wrote This is Angelina remember?! Hahahha.
Roxanne had alot of struggling going on with her because her mind was telling her "No" but her body was telling her "Heck yea!"
Oh, hormones...
Ben missed her. He honestly did and that's right, you don't give daisies to a girl you hadn't missed a little bit! For some reason that image of him standing outside of her window throwing rocks stuck in my mind and I might sketch it. Its hilarious to see him glaring up at her window waiting for her to pop out and say something to him. Hahahaha.
Ah, the uncomfortable bits! Done on purpose to, as you say, teach Roxanne a lesson for wearing such skimpy clothing. Benjamin kept commenting on it because he's, well, not in a good mood and her legs of course were amazing. Or perhaps he was a bit into his cups? No one might ever know.
You'll find out what's going on with his parents eventually.ish. I have so many other things to do first though! D':
And yes, the Royale is being hinted at and since you read the original you already know about it but for those who hadn't read it at all, stay quiet! Hahaah. :D
I know, I am being mean but if I'd continued on from where that kiss was leading I wouldn't have had this validated. At all. Its, uhm, pretty heavy stuff and I had to edit this quite a bit to make sure it was okay. ;)
You'll figure out why later I promise.
God, I hope I don't get the next chapter rejected...
Ben really, really wanted that kiss and so much more and I'm afraid that he got it. :p
Roxanne has made a bad choice and its going to bite her in her plump behind! (Ben is pleased by this of course AND her behind)
Yeah, he's a teenage boy...
Or a demon.
Not quite sure sometimes to be honest!
Thanks for coming back and reviewing! You're too nice to me! I'm going to hug your face! >:D
There's A Force of Wills to get to and Albus if you ever wanted to start up reading those again. I should have more chapters for various stories in the future. If I have my way with these darn library computers, that is. D':
Much love,
Gabbie


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