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Review:GirlOnTheSidelines says:
Hello again,

I absolutely loved the flashback it. They both seem so young and innocent. The bit about her not being a real Weasley because she's black made me really mad, I can't understand why anyone would be such an asshole and Roxanne has my full respect for punching that girl in the face. She needed it. It was great how Benjamin also told her a little about himself as we don't really hear much personal stuff from him. And his trying to give her flowers was adorable.

I love how playful they are together even though they haven't seen each other for ages. And how he blushed when she brought up the memory. I find his nickname 'lump' quite funny but I was just wondering where it came from, if anywhere? The bit where he nuzzles into her neck was interesting, especially how pleased he was with her reaction. But I'm probably (definitely) reading too much into it because, well, I'm a bit of a hopeless romantic sometimes.

Loved the description of Malfoy Manor, that place fascinates me. But the bit between Ben and Mr Malfoy was somewhat unsettling. I'm curious to know exactly what it was about but I can take a vague guess.

But the ending! You are so lucky I can go and read the next chapter in second or I would have been rather grumpy with you. Not that I can talk much, seeing some of my chapter endings. And he kissed her! Right, this was amazing but I have to move onto the next one, see you in a bit,

GirlOnTheSidelines x

P.S. I just noticed the title of this chapter and am curious about where Benjamin's middle name came from.

Author's Response: Hello!

Back again! This is becoming a habit, isn't it? Hahah. Welcome back!
I had some flashbacks in the previous chapter as you know but they had never reached this much into either of their characters.
So I was very pleased with the way this one turned out because it really was something that I had worked hard to get just right.
Ben innocent? Phew, I managed to pull it off! :D
I was worried that I wouldn't be able to because there's so much about him that we don't know much about, even in the present of the story.
Lucky you, huh? ;)
Yep. I was going into touchy territory when it came to Roxanne's race and I thought that, "Well. Why not?" and so I added it in because I know, personally what that's like being black myself so I just toyed around with it.
And yes, she punched that girl in the face and I'm glad you were able to respect her for it. My little Roxanne has her daddy's temper and her mother's fists.
But yes, Benjamin gave her flowers! It was really sweet of him and he tried, the little monster. :D
Notice that they're daisies like in the original?
Ah, their relationship is something really interesting isn't it? I have male friends like this that I haven't seen and we can play around and talk like we've never been apart. So I was taking some actual experiences in with that and honestly, Ben is just so fun to write. He does blush, he does laugh and yes, he does tease...he's not completely horrible.
Yet.
Oh, he calls her lump because well, he finds her kind of chubby in a cute way. He'll probably mention it somewhere down the line but most likely in a very, uhm, Ben-like way if you can catch my meaning.
You've been warned.
The reason for him being pleased with Roxanne's response is actually not quite a good thing but you'll just have to wait and see. >:D
You liked the way I had Malfoy Manor? I never think I do it quite right. I described it in A Force of Wills (That has two new chapters for you as well. Read those! Hahah.) but I didn't think I'd done a good job.
Yeah, the bit with Ben and his dad was a bit tense but you'll find out the why eventually but you probably already know. :D
Its nothing really nice.
Hahaha, yeah that ending! I tried my best but I wasn't sure if I'd done such a good job of it. I was like, "Well, uhm. I'd like to kiss Benjamin but I'll just have Roxanne being the lucky one." T-T
Please enjoy the next chapter and thanks for the kind words and such! You're super fantastic!
P.S.: Ben's middle name has something to do with the Weasley family. That's all I can say but you find out more sometime down the line.
Much love,
Gabbie


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