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Review:GirlOnTheSidelines says:
Hello!

Sorry it's taken me so long, life's being a pain. Anyway, glad to have several doses of Benjamin waiting for me!

Firstly, I have to disagree with Roxanne. How could she say sarcasm doesn't suit anyone? I love sarcasm (and ironically, that was not sarcasm). That said, I love little Dom Dom, she seems pretty strong and determined despite her stutter and I like that. The way she sees Benjamin so clearly to almost unnerving. I thought you did Roxie's emotional turmoil really well too, it's clear our Benjamin has a certain hold over her.

I absolutly loved the line: "the music had faded into her memory like a pleasant echo." I don't know why but it is just lovely.

I found the bit where Roxie is checking out her appearance quite interesting as for some reason, it makes her seem still quite childish, which is a bit worrying as she is sneaking out to meet Benjamin (I love the way she calls him Ben by the way). And her comment to him about her having grown up also seemed a bit childish.

But I loved his reaction when she said she'd had boyfriends, it kind of suggests he feels protective over her. Or possessive.

The bit at the end:
"I don't want to lose you."
"I don't want to lose you either."
That bit is pretty awesome. Kind of like you.

Anyway, I'm going to move onto the next chapter (this one was great by the way) so I will see you shortly,

GirlOnTheSidelines x

Author's Response: Hello!

Man, tell me how much real life sucks in great detail. I feel your pain my friend. But yes, how nice for you to get some Benjamin action! How delicious was this surprise? ;)
You know, sarcasm suits everyone but I think Roxanne was just trying to sound really smart to impress Ben. It didn't work. He sees through her pretty well! :D
Ah, Dom-Dom! I really do enjoy her character as well and I'll most likely be giving her a story some time down the line. She's going to be sort of bland in her replies but she'll have some interesting thought processes I think. Hopefully?
Yeah, Dom-Dom is smarter than she appears and she made it more than clear that she does not care for Benjamin Malfoy.
Can you blame her? Hahha.
Thanks for liking that line! It sort of wrote alot prettier than I thought for some reason. Something about the "pleasant echo..." really stirred something in me. :D
Ah. Here's the thing with the new Roxanne; She is very childish, and that was made more apparent in this version, especially with her checking out her figure. Its something I still do myself and I'm supposedly all grown up now! I didn't want her to appear as if she were some perfect Weasley miss, I needed her to have alot of flaws. I mean, she's only fifteen after all. I sort of forgot that in the other version and it sort of fell flat, where her character was concerned. :p
Oh, yes. She keeps mentioning how grown up she is over and over but to Benjamin, she's still a little lump and that's what really annoys her. She's trying so hard to make herself into someone he'll like. But she doesn't understand how dangerous that is! >:D
Ben is rather protective over her but it might lean more towards possession. He's a Malfoy and you know how I like writing my Malfoy men. Draco anyone? :3
Hahaha, I didn't like that last line at the end! I thought it was cheesy! But you've made me feel alot better! Thanks! *Blushes*
Thanks for reading and reviewing too! *Hugs*
Much love,
Gabbie


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