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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi Amanda! I'm finally here with your review :)

So I've been following this story as you've updated (even though I haven't been reviewing...shameful, I know), and I think this is my favorite chapter. I love everything about it; the imagery is spot on, the interactions between your characters feel very natural, and Helena's internal struggle is just gripping for me. Awesome job!

I just love the way you write Helga. She entertains me; one minute she says something totally vapid-sounding, and the next she's advising Helena to be a progressive woman. Everything she says is unexpected, and I love it :)

Helena just seems very unsure about the whole situation with Venn. All throughout the chapter, I just get the sense that she's overwhelmed, and feels caught up in something she's not ready for. The wedding dress discussion, her uncertainty about the token...things like that tell me that she's not comfortable with her situation. And Venn's cheating seems like a very convenient excuse for her to escape. It's so interesting to see her mind work here.

I have absolutely no concrit for you...I just really loved this chapter! Keep up the awesome work, and feel free to re-request for chapter 9!

--Maggie

Author's Response: Hello Maggie! Thank you for stopping by!

Ooh, I'm so glad you liked this chapter. It felt a little uncomfortable for me because I really don't like my action scenes in general, but I'm glad you felt like the parts I'm more confident about (i.e., characterization, imagery, emotion) helped it shine overall. That's great :)

I love Helga! I had been keeping her back as this secret weapon, and I just decided that it was time to introduce her. I think she provides a cool feminist-y perspective to the whole story, and hopefully a bit of humor. I love that you view her as unexpected!

I think it's important to remember that Helena is still so young. So little of this is up to her, and yet she's saddled with the responsibility. Venn, for his part, hasn't done very much to win her heart yet. Hopefully that will change :)

Thanks again for this wonderful review!

Amanda

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