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Review:caoty says:
Well, this is lovely.

I love almost everything about this. Your characterisation of everyone - even Charlie, whom we don't really see in canon... unless you count that one fic as canon... is absolutely believable and wonderful et cet et cet.

My favourite part was Percy's. Audrey as a grief counsellor! That's perfect and I never would have thought of it so well done you.

I'm also really digging (Jesus Christ, that sounds hilarious in my accent) the whole repetition you've got going on here, with the epitaph and Charlie's fairly accurate assessment of why things go wrong and Percy's constant angsting about how it should have been him, etc. It's very poetic. I love it.

That said, you've got a few Americanisms in there, and there was this one line that just doesn't click with me:

>...Ron finished, a single tear slipping over the freckles of his face.

Ummm... elegant display of emotions and Ron... I dunno, I always felt like he's the kind of person who'd either just straight-up start blubbering with snot and red eyes and all that, or not cry at all. Maybe that's just me, though.

Anyway. Apart from that. I do love this, very much, and I'm really glad I read it. :)

Author's Response: Hahah your part about Ron made me giggle. I was thinking more of him trying to hold his tears back, which is why only one came out, but now it does seem very elegant :P. Ahh I wish you would have pointed out the Americanisms!!! I tried to search through this, but the only thing I could think of is ice cream? Haha

Thank you so much for stopping by, m'dear! Your reviews always make my day!


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