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Review:Dark Whisper says:
Free Elf,

And here we are at the most recent chapter posted. Your story has been very sweet so far. It was nice that they celebrated his freedom with a picnic and the letter thanking her was wonderful and lovely.

The only thing I would suggest, is editing Hermione's letter a bit. For instance, she writes to Ron that she wants to have children with him someday, but then tells him she likes someone else. So, I think perhaps if you remove the phrase "with you" it might flow better. This is just a friendly suggestion of course. This is your story and you should write it how you want. :)

Congrats on posting seven chapters of your first fanfic. I want to encourage you along and hope that you continue until it is finished. It is quite an accomplishment to finish and you will be proud of yourself. :)

Probably my favorite part of this chapter is your crystal constellations hovering above her. I love magical elements in stories... keep them coming.

Dark Whisper

Author's Response: Awww thank you so much for reviewing, you're right, I just re-read it and it does sound a bit conflict-y (if that's a word) I will change it asap

I'm so glad you enjoyed it :) xxx


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