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Review:Dark Whisper says:
Magic,
Wow, I'm really behind in reading your story. Sorry about that... :) I know I read this long ago, but thought I had reviewed it. Oopsie.

Anyway... on to this chap. Poor Draco... He was so desparate to find her, even though he was in such great pain. Poor thing. I'm so glad that she was able to fix him. I thought you really did a great job on describing his pain and then his passing out. I felt that it was very realistic.

I absolutely loved this line... "... the ugly truth was poisoning the very air they were breathing." Wonderful writing. I wish I was better at coming up with those kinds of lines, giving an intangible thing an action verb. I can't remember what that is called in technical writing terms, but I love it. :)

As far as the story, this chapter really shows an important turning point as he trusts her with the truth, agrees to help them, and then 'proves it.' And I love, love the way he proves himself. :D

One last thing about this chap is when he asks her if she really thinks Harry can defeat the Dark Lord. I pretty much let out a bit of a gasp at this. You wrote as if he held some hope for it to be true. Awesome!

Anyway... great job. I'll be reading on...

Sincerely,
Dark Whisper

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