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Review:True Author says:
Hello! I'm True Author with your requested review! =]

This was an amazingly amazing story, I must say. I was almost in tears when I reached the final line. This was a very touching and lovely fic.

I loved your idea of the plot and flow. This story has a nice flow, as the reader never gets bored while reading this. Lily's not in the story, but her characterization is simply great. The reader perfectly understands how Lily was "Lovely Lily" and how everyone loved her so much. Besides Lily, Ginny was nicely characterized too. Her feelings, emotions and the situation certainly effect the reader's mind. I'm sure the funeral will make anyone cry. =[

Still, you need to do a bit of work on Harry's characterization. Harry was surely sensitive and in your story he isn't crying so that seemed weird. You must give some lines for his feelings and some minor or major changes in his mannerism. That will make this more effective.

I think you should think of a different summary; a catchy one. I'll suggest you to write Ginny's speech on her funeral as the story summary. The starting of this chapter should be catchy too. I'll suggest you to find a song that fits and to write it's lyrics. Lyrics have an excellent effect on the chapter. But these are just suggestions, if you want a better one, you may go to the forums and ask for help or you can do it yourself you're a good author. And why did she end her life is not cleared. whatever those "people" did to her should be explained.

I hope this was not harsh; I just wanted to improve this nice story. =]

Author's Response: It's not harsh at all :) CC is great!

Thank you for reviewing and sorry for making you cry *hands out tissues*

Thanks for the CC, I'm deffinatly gonna take it on board :)

- Potterfan310


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