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Review:AdeleShare says:
Hi CambAngst!

I thnik you've done excellently on protraying Draco in this chapter. He is definitley acting like a twerp! I think you've got him spot on. He's a stuck-up 16 yr old and he is not at all pleased with the Auror invasion of his familys home. It would be weird if he stood by and handled things maturely haha

As for your Bella, I think you did awesome incorropating her madness into her interactions with her sister and nephew. I forget that she probably hadn't met Draco before she got locked up, or at least when he was just a baby. I loved the part where she hugged him and he knew that she wouldn't release him until he gave her the answer she wanted to hear. It put a little twist in how Draco got suckered into being a Death Eater. I always wondered if he had been forced and by the looks of things that's the way you're going to go with this tale. I'm sure it's not completley invouluntary, I'm sure he'd have ended up being one no matter. Bu having him feel like he had to because of his aunt Bella is interesting.

Sorry it took a while to get this one up! I got a little busy this weekend ;) (had a few engagments to attend to, like a concert haha so nothing that wasn't pleasant.)

I'm glad you've asked me to to reveiw this story as you put it up, I'm scared to get to the next chapter cause then I know I'll probably have to wait a bit for the next one and I am really enjoying it so far!

I'll get onto number 4 right away :D

Thanks,

~AdeleShare

Author's Response: Hi! I'm always super-excited to see what you think about this story. I feel like you "get" where I'm going with Draco and what makes him tick in my world.

He is extremely bratty at the start of this chapter, but he definitely starts to figure some things out by the time it's over. When he's taunting the Auror, he's still quite full of himself. He believes that he can be as rude as he likes because sooner or later, everything is going to blow over.

Bellatrix was fun to write, but intimidating at the same time. It's so hard to gauge whether you're getting her to sound right. And there's so little to go on in the books. Really, if you check, she has next to to dialog. I think she only appears so much in the movies because Helena Bonham Carter is so amazing.

His induction into the Death Eaters, ultimately, will be anything but voluntary. But that is a topic for a later chapter...

No worries. I appreciate all of the time and thought you put into these reviews. You do a really valuable, really amazing service for all of the authors on HPFF and I can't say 'thank you' enough. Here's a start, though: Thank you for reading and reviewing!


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