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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review! I'm sorry it's taken me so long to actually write it but, as I mentioned in my responses, I've been busy with work.

This chapter was certainly very interesting and full of developments. I think that you've done an absolutely fantastic job with your characterization of Draco. He's protective of his family and very prideful. His thoughts sound so him, especially in the manner he thinks about Harry.

The moment on the train where Draco attacked Harry was very well done. I had forgotten about that moment in the books but it fit in perfectly with the chapter. It definitely brought Draco's "sneaky" and underhanded tactics to the forefront- he attacks only when he thinks that he can win.

His thoughts after the news of the incident at the Ministry becomes public were very interesting. I don't think that he's ever been in such a position of loneliness before, where everyone avoided him and scorned him. His desire for companionship and friendliness was an intriguing moment for his character because it showed how fragile and young he still is, no matter how important and grown-up he tries to act.

And then when Pansy "breaks up" with him... I wasn't expecting that to happen (I overestimated her adoration of him) but it certainly made sense. Pansy is still a Slytherin, after all, and they tend to look after their own skin whenever possible. To continue to show her love for him would be to throw her lot onto his sinking ship and she's too concerned about her own survival for that to happen. Draco would do exactly the same thing if he was in her position- he just wasn't prepared to see the tables turned on him yet again.

I liked the scene at the end of the chapter. Dumbledore's actions fit in with what we know of his later concern over Draco's life, though I'm sure that Draco will never understand why Dumbledore is doing what he is. Their thought processes are too different for Draco to understand him.

As well, you also added an extra depth to Tonks' character. She isn't just the fun-loving Auror that we usually see in the books; she's protective of her family, same as Draco is, and though she may not like what Dumbledore asked her to do she will do it because he asked her to.

I only noticed one small thing as I was reading this and it truly is just a matter of opinion. At one point in the chapter you described Narcissa's tone as "exasperated" and I found it strange that Narcissa would allow herself to show such an "undignified" emotion.

All in all, I think that you did a great job with this chapter. It will be interesting to see how Draco will react to the changes in Voldemort's treatment of his family- his family's reputation and his father will no longer protect him for his wrath. Thanks for requesting and I hope that my comments are helpful!

Author's Response: Hey, Roots!

Ugh, tell me about it. I just got back from a 3-day sales meeting. And the biggest thing I brought back? More new projects. :-/

Anyway, I'm glad you're still liking the way that Draco is coming along. He's taken the first couple of shots that life throws at him and managed to mostly remain standing, but there are many more to come.

I re-read the end of OotP before I started writing this, so I knew I had to work the train scene in somehow. That meant that I had to get Crabbe and Goyle back into Draco's pocket, although it didn't seem like much of a stretch, really.

He's definitely never been in a situation where he lacks people who want to kiss up to him, so that's definitely a new thing. So there was a little more to Pansy than I made her out to be in the last chapter, which was somewhat by design. It's another way to show that every element of Draco's charmed life was mostly for looks and could go away in a hurry if his circumstances changed.

I do think Dumbledore was concerned for Draco, going back a long way. Draco is a product of his environment. From that standpoint, having Lucius for a father narrowed his outcomes quite a bit.

Ah, Tonks! One of the most underused characters in the books. This isn't a story about her, but I did want to make the most of her appearances.

I think maybe I need a different adjective for Narcissa. What I had in my mind was that sort of haughty sigh that snobby people use to say, "I suppose I must continue to tolerate your presence, you common little man." Back to the drawing board...

I'm very glad that you enjoyed it. I'm working on the Dark Lord's first appearance now. Hopefully it will be a big splash. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!


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