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Review:Moonyxluna says:
Hi! I'm here with your requested review! [I know you said two and three in your request but just so you know I only do one chapter at a time ;)]

aww! *hugs* I'm glad I could help! And now I feel bad that I took so long to get to this review. We moved! I've been spending every single second unpacking boxes and boxes so I'm glad I could finally get to this story!

I think I'm in love. I may have said this before about Malfoy but this, this is different. - I love this line. I think it was such a perfect way to start the chapter after meeting the guy in the previous. It says a lot about Rose; not quite sure what yet, but it definitely adds to her character.

I don't get why Dom where's makeup - should be wears ;) Also, I think you could downplay Dominique's beauty a little. I mean, I understand, it's a great method to keep Rose relatable and it does work, but I think it was a little bit too much in the beginning.

I did notice a few more grammar things, so make sure you're keeping an eye on those :) Otherwise the beta section on the forums is really helpful ;)

I really like the development in Phoebe. She's fun, and I think she adds to Rose. I still would like to see a bit more from Rose, but even from the last chapter to this one she is growing on me. I did think the end was very fun; looking down to her wrist and not realizing she wasn't wearing a watch until after she left the house :D

I think the flow for the first half of the chapter worked really well, but once we got to Diagon Alley I felt like things got a little rushed. Maybe add a few more transition sentences to the part before the 'four hours later' ?

Again, please do re-request! I'm loving the Rose/OC (I know I already told you that, but I had to say it again) and I'm really curious to see where some of the things you've set up will head. Keep up the good work!

-Julie

Author's Response: Hiya :D (I'll make sure to request 3)

I didn't realsie I had put where until my beta told me. Silly Me :)
I love writing Phoebe she's mad as a hatter!

Thanks again xx
Soph x

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