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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! Sorry this has taken me ages to get to! You asked about the switching of PoVís - I didnít find it the least bit confusing! You make it very clear who it is right away, and I think it really kept things new and interesting.

I actually started to feel extremely bad for Lily in this chapter. She wants to be just like all of the socially accepted people, and part of me thinks sheís trying to make herself more like them as opposed to actually being like them.

I really adore the theme of her being embarrassed by her family. How true is that for everyone? Weíve all been in the situation where we just want to roll our eyes and crawl away. My mom is a vegan, so every time we go out to eat she has to spend a million hours grilling the waitress to find a food that doesnít have animal products. Youíve made Lily very easy to identify with on that front. Yes, sheís overly concerned with perfection and a bit OCD - but I feel like she really thinks she has to be. She reminds me of that girl in high school who looks like the popular girls and talks like them, but inside her thereís just something different that keeps her from being one of them. Lily looks and talks, and worries, like all the other ladies looking to acquire a husband - but thereís also something different.

I really enjoyed Albus. He was so different and I just wanted to be his friend. Iím curious if it is just his looks, or if the comments referring to his intelligence are true or just those of a sister

You do a wonderful job at keeping this light hearted, these small jokes you put in helps the story keep a completely different level of interest and lets your voice as an author come through, which I love.

And now! What have you set us up for? I am so excited to see more of this ball!

This was a really wonderful chapter, it had enough magic and mention of past names/ideas (phoenix cuffs and Dumbledore, great additions) to make me feel like Iím reading a fan fiction, but it still is something so different and interesting, I just loved getting lost for a bit in this different world!

Author's Response: Don't worry about how long it takes - I'd rather have a lovely long review like this than have you rush (or worse yet, take time away from more important things). This story isn't going anywhere. :D Thank you very much for being able to take the time to read and review it! I do appreciate it.

That's excellent to hear about the switch of POVs (well, it's still 3rd person, but the main focus character switches), especially that it keeps the story interesting. I think I'll include things from Lily's side from time to time - her story will make for a solid sub-plot and will contrast nicely with what happens to Rose.

It's even better to hear that Lily is a character readers can relate to - one would be hard-pressed to find someone who isn't somehow embarrassed by their family (or even just one family member). Lily's situation is perhaps more extreme in that she can't stand about 75% of her relatives, but I'm pleased that this aspect of her chararacter makes her more realistic. You're right to say that she's a bit of a "wannabe" girl, wanting to be perfect and ladylike, but she can't escape being a Potter-Weasley - it hangs about her like a taint, and she wishes it would just go away (both in terms of her family and the aspects of her personality that she keeps out of sight). My first conception of her wasn't this complicated at all! XD It makes me happy that she has these different facets and layers - it will be fun to do more with them as the story continues!

*blushes* Thank you for your wonderful compliments! I could keep saying "I'm glad", but it wouldn't actually express how happy I am to hear these things. This story is taking more work than I anticipated, growing in complexity and depth in exciting ways. Let's hope that I can carry it through until the end! :D


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