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Review:CloakAuror9 says:
Hi, Aderyn! Here I am with your story review prizes :P I'm so sorry if they took so long to get to you. I've just been really busy with life. (:

Jogging? Wow, these women are goddesses. I can't even speed walk on high heels, how did they manage to jog? Ha, maybe it's one of the perks of being a witch I suppose. Enchant your feet to be capable of tolerating pain and jogging in heels. :P Oh and I thought the clothes transfiguration was pretty clever.

From the moment Jacob was introduced, I knew that he was bad news! The club? The drink? I thought he was going to spike her drink, but she got robbed instead -totally a lot better compared to drinking a spiked beverage. I just found it a bit odd that Elena wasn't thinking of ways to fend him off by magic. If I was Elena, non-verbal spells would probably be on my mind the moment I enter the club and my hand gripped tightly on my wand.

In another way, Elena could still be taking in what is happening and her surroundings. Maybe she thought Muggles could do no harm to her so she didn't really see the point of defending herself. She's a healer after all, she's used to curing people and not harming them. So in a way, the way she acted in the chapter didn't really seemed that off to me.

I think you're improving a lot with each chapter. This one especially, had a lot of good imagery and feelings to it. I could feel the shivers that went down Elena's spine as she walked on the Muggle streets on that very cold night.

Like I said before, I feel that Elena would be better off with Corinne rather than Simon. Simply because to me, Corinne is always straight-forward even though she keeps some of the important information from Elena. In saying that, I do feel sorry for Elena, getting the bitter end of Corinne even though she didn't even do anything to her. *sigh* Poor Elena.

I think the story is going really well and each chapter has a lot of mystery in it (which by the way, is killing me). The mystery is never ending I suppose. Really good job with the chapter! It flowed smoothly and the story just keeps getting better and better.

Jacob is stupid, Elena will never call him,
Izzy xx

Author's Response: Hi Izzy,

So it's terrible that I haven't even responded to some of your earlier reviews. But I'm catching up now!

Haha, yeah, jogging in heels, now that you mention it, is probably a bit unrealistic, especially considering that it's winter/snowy. But lets go with magic high heels? Okay? :)

I can see how Elena's behavior seems odd. Jacob is a creep, but I think that she is really unprepared in general. Or more like she's prepared for dark magic not some creepy guy.

Corinne isn't guarded, you're right. I don't know if one is better than the other, but there are definitely pluses and minuses for each. Especially since Corinne is being bitter and not just blunt.

I'm glad that you're enjoying things so far. And the mystery only keeps building from here!

Thanks so much for reviewing!! And you're very right about that last bit. Elena really never would call him.

Haley


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