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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Oh my god this story needs a "rip your heart out and smash it on the floor" warning. Snape/Lily is sort of a warning in that direction, but this one, with that ending, is a hundred times more painful. Snape's line, so formal in its language and sincere in its belief, hit me like a cement truck, and I'm left speechless. Trying to write this much has been really hard, actually, but I'll keep blundering along, with many squees on the way.

What's perfect about this story is how you evoke a lot of powerful emotion with the bare minimum of words. You say more in a fragment than others could say in a paragraph. Yet you also include lines that deconstruct and recreate cliches, like how, instead of saying "his heart stopped", you say "He is certain that if he looked for it, he would not find his pulse." It has far more impact the way you've used it. The cliche has lost its meaning with overuse, so by rewriting it - making it more literal than metaphorical - you've made it new.

I wish this moment had happened in canon, though that's my Snily side showing through. To have them talk and reveal themselves to each other like this is more satisfying than canon - it suits Lily that she would do something like this rather than never speak to Snape again. And her words are also very realistic - the two of them are too different to be happy together, especially in the kind of world they live in. Snape still lives in a fantasy where he and Lily would be happily ever after, but she sees the sad truth - maybe she always has.

Gah, I didn't mean to ramble on like this. Before I make the review longer than the story, I'll just say that this was fantastic! That isn't surprising, since you're Meghna and that name means awesome. ;)

Author's Response: SHALL I COMPARE THEE TO A SUMMER'S DAY? Ugh Susan your reviews are the worst ever and by worst I mean the best, obviously. I don't even know how to reply to this, look at what you've done!

Bare minimum of words is right. I couldn't get to a thousand words without causing some large-scale destruction. But powerful emotion? Really? I was worried that for an angsty Snily, it would be seriously lacking. But I'm so so glad you thought so. Hur I thought over that line about his pulse like .. four times over haha crying because you noticed it :3

I know, right? I feel like there was too little said about how it ended for them. Sure, that meant more ideas for fanfic writers, but CLOSURE. And yes, it was kind of hard depicting that Lily both wanted to be with him and didn't want to -- though that was only because they'd be terrible together.

RAMBLE ALL YOU WANT REALLY. Shhh *blushes and swoons* thank you so much Susan you're the best seriously ♥ ♥

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