It's me again! I'm sorry it took so long for me to read this. I'm not going to lie--I was putting it off. I didn't want to have to wait for updates! ;] But now, alas, I am here! :D
Continuity: Okay, so I don't really think this a continuity issue, but I couldn't think of a better name for this bullet point. :P I was just thinking it was a little strange that Alice conjured a chair and a sofa when they're IN a furniture store. It was just a little silly, haha.
Characterization: Okay! We have Elena. Elena...the brave, terrified, strong, crumbling, perfect Elena. She's such a mass of contradictions, but I adore her. I think you've created such a realistic woman that is going through so many difficult things. I respect her, which is an impressive thing to feel towards a fictional character. Then we have Simon who I personally think is acting really bizarrely. He's not usually that...cross? So I'm wondering what's going on with that. Then we have Corinne who's great, as usual. I like that she's got such fire in her, but she still gets scared when faced with things she doesn't completely understand. And our dear Moody is perfectly on par. Anddd...oh! Alice and Frank. DON'T GET TORTURED INTO CRAZINESS, I LOVE YOU. Well...I know I'm not going to get my way with that one, sadly. :[
Descriptions: I loved how you described the smoke and the fire. I really felt like I could see it and feel it. Really dramatic. Well done.
Emotions: I think I might have liked to see more of Elena's fear or confusion throughout their preparation for the battle and when they were searching for Simon. I got some of it, but I think there are certain points where it can be emphasized even more.
Plot: Ahhh! WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN? WRITE MORRE! I hate that I have to wait for updates now, haha. I'm so in love with this story. Of course, you HAVE to rerequest when you write more. I'll die if I don't know how this story ends. ANYWAY. I liked the scene where Corinne decided really abruptly to go looking for her partner. She's a very loyal person and I like that. And then Elena's mention of why they weren't using bubble-head charms! Great! I was actually wondering why they weren't, and then my question was answered! :D And now they're preparing for a battle with psychotic Death Eaters. I'm freaking out! I can't wait to see what happens next.
Interactions: I was sadly disappointed in how Simon acted towards Elena in this chapter. What a jerk. I'm wondering if there's more of a reason for that, though. Hmmm. We'll see! :] And I love the Alice/Frank moments, even if they depress me since I know that their happiness isn't going to last! Because I honestly think this is sticking to canon. I'm FREAKING OUT. As I've mentioned. ;]
Style: BEAUTIFUL. WONDERFUL. SPECTACULAR. AMAZING. PERFECT. MORE ADJECTIVES. yeah.
I cannot waittt to see what happens! Congratulations on your TA status! You're doing absolutely beautifully. I love this story. So, so much. :D Request more when it's written. I'll never get sick of reading this story. :D
Author's Response: Hello!
(again apologies for how long it's taken to reply -hides-)
Oh. Yep. That is a very valid continuity issue. I will go back and reread it, but maybe the other ones were broken down/burnt?
Ahh ♥ Seriously I am so honored/humbled that you feel this way about these characters. yeah. so. no words. or i'll get too emotional or something.
I will try to fix the emotions-- This chapter is already pretty long, right? So I didn't want to bog it down with over sentimentalizing stuff. But yeah, Elena is worried and I do want that to come across.
I feel terrible that I have been so bad about updating. But there are 2 chapters beyond what you have reviewed, I think, now. And they are two long chapters! And I have another one in the works! I will send you an apology PM/check to see if your review thread is still around :) Because I know there's little chance you'll see this response on your own.
Yeah, Simon's behavior is hopefully explained soon. Though if he's being too too terrible, I may need to edit that, because I don't want people to start hating him.
Adjectives to describe you: BEAUTIFUL. WONDERFUL. SPECTACULAR. AMAZING. PERFECT. ♥
Thank you again, so so much for the review. It's utterly appalling that I didn't respond sooner. I can't even make more excuses! And thank you so much for your support of this story--it means the absolute world to me as an author!!