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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
How did I not know that you had a Peter Pettigrew story?! It's a crime that I haven't come across it before, but now I am here to attack it with a million squees because it is amazing. Well, I guess it's more of a story that includes Peter rather than a story about him - he instigates the action, but he's more of a passing shadow. That, for me, is where the brilliance of this story comes from. You took a perspective distanced from Peter. Better yet, that perspective is a Muggle one. *flails* Who does that? Not enough people, that's for sure, but you have, and oh-my-gosh-it's-fantastic.

With a few specific, everyday details, you create living people who become caught up in something far beyond their comprehension. It didn't take me long to figure out what would happen, and I spent a lot of this story yelling at Christine to get the hell out of there, but I still loved the suspense - the knowing actually made the story more interesting. It's the ticking time-bomb theory of suspense - that agony of inevitability is far more effective than just showing something blowing up. And I notice, genius that you are, you don't show the blowing up bit - it happens so fast that Christine never knows what hit her, poor girl. You developed these Muggle characters amazingly within a short span of time, which is something I always find impressive.

There was one line I think may need rewording - Well, I suppose these things to happened - I understand what you meant, but the syntax is off. Of course, Peter could be absolutely off his rocker and can no longer speak properly, so if that's it, then no worries. :P

I liked how you set off the "main action" with the scenes at the bar. Peter is fascinating in those scenes, though we only get snatches of him, but there is a strange combination of fear, suspicious behaviour, and maliciousness verging on a sort of insanity. It could be the trauma of the blast that lead him to giggle, but it could equally, if not more likely, be that same kind of madness Bellatrix and Voldemort display - a blatant and terrifying disregard for others. Your Peter is chilling, but he's still pathetic too in that usual Peterish way. He's complex and I'm having trouble pinning him down, which of course, is another thing I like - it's more exciting to have villains that are difficult to read. After finishing your story, I'm still left with many questions and I still want more.

Needless to say, this story is fabulous and I wish I'd read it sooner. Everything I read from you is so good, of the highest quality and extremely interesting, it's not at all fair. It's wonderful that you write so much because otherwise, you'd have me constantly bothering you to write more amazing stories like this. ^_^

Author's Response: I had no idea you liked Peter Pettigrew stories! I think that's fantastic -- although I don't really like him, per se, he's undeniably an interesting character, and I'm always appreciative of someone who can write him. Which, seeing as you won the Peter Pettigrew TGS duel, I know you can!

When Sarah asked me to write about this moment in particular, I was a bit surprised at first, simply because it's never something I would have picked. But that's her brain, I suppose, thinking of all these missing moments, and I had such fun writing this! I do think it's because of something you mentioned -- bringing out the people around Sirius and Peter, and fleshing out their situations instead of leaving them faceless and nameless. (Also, not sure how that line's slipped through edits -- awkward. I've got it fixed now, so thank you for pointing it out!)

For the bar scenes, I actually didn't intend to keep weaving them throughout. I showed Sarah the first portion of the first bar scene, and it was she who actually made me think to make the 'mysterious shadowy figure' Peter at all. :3 I'm very glad you liked it! I think he is a little insane, but mostly just terrified -- within a day he's basically been the result for the literal/figurative deaths of two of the people who are supposed to be his best friends.

Gahh, thank you so much for coming by and leaving such a sweet review, Susan! ♥ I'm honestly just so happy (and flattered!) you liked it. I'll keep on writing as long as people like you keep being so supportive. :3 I can't tell you what this means to me!


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