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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, there!

I was looking for something new to read and this story definitely piqued my interest. Based on the way that JKR left Narcissa's character in a rather awkward and vulnerable state at the end of Deathly Hallows, I've always wondered whether she would have attempted to rebuild her shattered relationship with her sister. So I'm excited to see your take on the topic.

The way you built up Andromeda's character in the beginning was really well done. You achieved a really nice blend of the despair and vulnerability of a recently widowed, middle-aged witch facing the daunting prospect of raising her infant grandson by herself and the imperturbable, aristocratic strength of a daughter of the Noble and Most Ancient House of Black.

Her recollections of Ted and Dora were so touching and poignant. The dog was such a striking touch. It made everything feel very accessible and easy to relate to. Also the pictures in the hallway.

When she finally realizes who the letter is from, I thought her reaction was pitch-perfect. Angry rejection, tinged with just a bit of longing and doubt. This is how the healing process begins. The letter itself was also well done. Not gushing or over-the-top. But still a big step for Narcissa.

Your writing was terrific in this. Everything flowed nicely and there was a good mix of description, narrative and Andromeda's inner monologue. I didn't see any mistakes or grammar issues.

I'm looking forward to reading more of this. It's a very interesting topic and it seems that you have some good ideas as to how to approach it.

Author's Response: Blegh, sorry it's taken me so long to respond - RL has been a bit stressful, and I haven't had the time to give your reviews the attention they deserve.

Thank you so much for the review, and I'm glad you enjoyed this prologue! I actually edited in a lot of the details in this - the dog, the photographs, etc - later on, after I'd gotten a couple helpful reviews suggesting I add in a bit more detail. I'm really glad that they worked for you and helped bring the story and the situation to life.

Thank you so much for the review.


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