You did that thing with description I really like, where all my senses are piqued, and I can feel and hear and smell the setting. So mysterious with the mysterious voices D: WHO ARE THESE PEOPLE. Elena revving to apparate away, yes be prepared girl. I like that she does not want to be there, and that she's treating this as 'okay, I'm with potentially really dangerous people'.
Omg, I actually really like that other woman, Corinne. She is so take charge, and it's like, she clearly has her own agenda of things, because it's not like she wants to drag in unnecessary people. Simon's clearly messed up or something of that sort. Or the matter seems to justify a bit of her harshness.
She could have summed up the situation many ways, but none of the others would have been quite as succinct or accurate. HEEE, I like this little wit.
Awwwh, Elena thinking of her family :c and even when she's emotional, I can sort of see her detached way of looking at it, like it's a responsibility. Sometimes I think it her thoughts sound a little over-explained and wordy though. Leaving a bit more to the reader's imagination is just fine ^__^
Mmhmm, Corinne is totally super in charge. When the minister dies, I don't expect there's much time to be nice, nope. Especially when your partner can't even brew a Polyjuice. C'mon, Hermione could! I like her and Simon's banter :D
Ahh in canon, Polyjuice of the dead means they'll change into the dead bodies, correct? I suppose it's just a minor canon change then, unless I'm wrong. Oooh, I wonder if Elena's supposed to "autopsy" the body, or whatever the wizard equivalent is, and figure out what killed him. Forensic drama!
Now to find out how she'll react!
Author's Response: Hello!
I'm glad you liked the descriptions--I like figuring out what to describe--what's important, depending on the mood of the chapter. Though I agree that 'mysterious' is the best descriptive word, at this point xD And Elena is definitely trying to get out of there, like any non-crazy person.
Not to give away too much, but let's just say that Simon wasn't being the smartest when he just decided to grab Elena. Corinne has a lot more common sense, and can keep her head.
Little wit, that is the only kind of wit I can manage. Except for sarcasm (Corinne likes sarcasm).
Okay, I will look at that. Elena does -think- a lot. So it is totally possibly I got a bit carried away.
Really? I didn't remember that...where does it say that? (Not that I don't trust you, my canon knowledge is by no means perfect). I know that in GoF, it says that if you die under Polyjuice, you keep the form of whomever you transformed into (cause that's what Barty Jr. and his mom did). But I didn't know that it had that effect too. (I mean I knew that Barty Jr. kept Moody alive, but he said it because he needed that hair and cause he needed to study Moody). I will check my CoS book though. (And while forensic drama would be quite awesome, the intention is to transform into a living minister).
Anyways, thanks again for the review! Your reviews quite amusing to read =D