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Review:Beeezie says:
Hey, here to review your challenge entry!

Huh. This was a really, really interesting story, and I'd love to see where you take it. I'm not completely sure it fulfills the letter of what your prompt was, but I honestly don't really care - it's a creative take on that line between the muggle world and the wizarding one, and that's really what I was trying to get at.

Okay. I'm still sitting here trying (and failing) to get over this chapter. I mean, it's short, but you just brought up so many questions for me, and the ways in which Lily and James might have interacted with the muggle population during the period they were hiding out for had honestly never really occurred to me. When I first finished this chapter, I thought, "But but the charm how could Jane have even seen?!"

Then I started thinking about it, and I realised that while they were obviously careful about who they told, someone needed to know, and who better than Muggles? They're obviously not going to go kill Lily and James themselves (well, not for the reason Voldemort did), and they wouldn't be able to tell anyone else.

I would have liked to have seen a little more about how the charm has affected Jane or how she knew them - not much, just a little hint or two (kind of along the lines of the comment about the parents of trick-or-treaters all going as witches and wizards). Other than that, though, this was a really thought-provoking prologue, and I can't wait to read chapter 2!

Author's Response: Hey hey. :)

I'm glad you like it. ^_^ I had a really good think about the prompt you gave me, but rewrote my first chapter four times before I was happy with it. It ended up becoming my first chapter while I uploaded this as the prologue.

I'm glad that you've got unanswered questions, and hopefully they'll be answered throughout the story. It won't be overly long. Probably a three or four-shot.

Anyway, I'm so glad that you liked this, particularly as it was inspired by your prompt, and I hope you like chapter two next as much.

- Adele. ^_^


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