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Review:The Last Marauder says:
This was just so brilliant and so funny and I just loved it so much!

When they get the box and they ask is it blue? can we eat it? That just really made me laugh. I also love how they are counting down the seconds and minutes until their birthday and how they think Ron isn't as brilliant as they are.

I loved the idea of the twins exploding all their bedroom furniture when as their first sign of magic - that is definitely something they would do. And Percy still afraid to sleep with his broom in his room, that just really made me laugh.

Just one little thing though, I could be wrong here, but seeing as they chapter is from Fred and George's point of view, shouldn't Arthur be referred to as Dad throughout? - I mean outside of dialogue, like said Dad, instead of said Arthur? It's just you refer to Ron as Ronnie outside of dialogue - Whee said Ronnie, and Ronnie is how the twins refer to Ron, so I think you should change Arthur to Dad, but that's just me and maybe I'm wrong here!

Anyway, great chapter, I'm beginning to wonder if they will get the baby dragon now! Must read on! ;)

Author's Response: Hi again!

I remember making the decision to use "Arthur" instead of "Dad", but I don't remember why... Maybe it's because I used his POV in this chapter, so he became his own person, instead of just a dad... I didn't do anything from "Ronnie's" POV... I'll have to re-read and see if that still makes sense. Thanks for giving me something to think about!


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