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Review:Roots in Water says:
I really liked this one-shot! It's a very interesting perspective on Sirius' character. I liked how you had Sirius defend her from bullies and be naturally polite - things that fit with his character due to his personality and his upbringing, while also being things that would inspire a crush, no matter how indifferent to her he was while he was performing them.

I really liked how you began this story. It was an amusing beginning and the repetition of the word "considering" gave the story a smooth flow while also giving the reader some information on the character.

As well, the way in which you included little hints of what we know about that scene was very nicely done - for the question that made him chuckle, I'm assuming that it was the werewolf question. I liked the way you had her describe it because it made it easy to guess what the cause of his laughter was without making it seem as though she was in on the joke.

As well, I liked how you made Sirius less of a womanizer here, as some people are apt to characterize him, and instead had him focus on his friends. The way he refused her definitely showed me that he was unused to girls asking him out.

Finally, I think that you did a good job with your portrayal of her emotions- she likes him but she realizes that he doesn't even know who she is. She's accepted it, however sad it's made her, and only admires him from afar. The last sentence made his indifference to her - and her awareness of this fact- brutally clear.

All in all I think that you did a fantastic job with this one-shot. It was very enjoyable to read!

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