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Review:Roots in Water says:
The summary immediately caught my eye when I was looking through the list of stories - the Mirror of Erised was a pretty dark item, even though it at first seems harmless, for it's capable of trapping a man/woman before it and keeping him/her there until they die.

And wow- this story did not disappoint! It's quite amazing the amount of emotion you managed to get across in 500 words... But I suppose that a good deal of the emotion sprouted from the details that you didn't include. There is obviously something frightening about the mirror - the fact that it shows you horrible things - but I think that a large part of the horror of it comes from the fact that it's so realistic, as though it actually should be happening, should have happened, will occur, that you start to doubt your own sanity. I liked how you indicated that Dorcas was losing faith in her own abilities when she couldn't remember if the images that the mirror showed had already occurred to her.

As well, the constant repetition of "Dorcas" completed the effect beautifully. It was quite creepy to read the word without knowing exactly who said it. I imagine that it was the mirror, trying to tempt her back into gazing at it, but the idea that an inanimate object is capable of speech just made the scene creepier.

Finally, I think that you did a brilliant job with your ending. You finished the story with a hint of what was to become of Dorcas - I assume she's about to be killed - and there was no indication as to who had said the last "Dorcas...", ending the story perfectly.

All in all, I think that you did a great job with this story. You did a fantastic job of capturing the horror of Dorcas' situation as well as transmitting her emotions. I really enjoyed reading it.

Author's Response: Oh, I'm glad! :) The second task was definitely good to this story - there were a lot of people going through the 'Recently Added' list, and I think that the combination of the length and the summary drew a lot of readers in. I definitely lucked out!

I'm sorry I haven't had the chance to respond until now - RL has been very stressful the last few weeks, and I just haven't really had the mental energy to write or answer reviews. *hides*

I definitely agree re: the Mirror of Erised - it was a creepy mirror with a huge dark side, but as I was rereading PS at one point, it occurred to me that Erised was creepy and dangerous in a sneaky sort of way, and that it would be interesting if there were other mirrors in the Wizarding World that weren't so sneaky about driving you crazy.

I'm really glad you liked this. Thank you so much for the review!

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