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Review:Jchrissy says:
Awww, you are going to get me hooked on two of your novels, arenít you?

Luna is becoming a character that I really love reading. Which is odd, because I was never absolutely crazy about her in the books. This first chapter makes me want to sink my teeth into her and really listen to her story.

Amazing job with the descriptions. You had just the right amount so I wasnít skipping through them to get to the point, but was very aware of the scene.

I also think they really flow with Lunaís character. I do think she would notice everything, so having your descriptions mirror that is perfect! Youíve inspired me to go through the first 3 chapter of BTF and add a bit more descriptions in there, too...

I think Lunaís characterization is brilliant so far. It was great to have her leaving the office, because and an actual job are really hard for me to warp my head around. Though the Q is something she loves, itís odd to think of her as all grown up, you know? Aww, Iím going to get emotional...

The characters that played a minor appearance did so beautifully! Harry was the perfect image of a loving father who has an adventurous son, and you did a great job giving us a glance into his life through Luna. Fixer upper house? Such a perfect and new idea! I donít know why, but I really like it!

Neville was also well done. You aged him to just the right degree, kept a touch of his awkwardness but coated it in the love he feels for his new wife (Deeds has made me adore Hannah and Neville, so I was really happy that you ended this chapter with their wedding)-- perfect.

Luna almost feels a bit lost to me. Maybe Iím reading too far into things. But she seems at a different state of disconnection than just her average dreamy self.

PS: Happy marriage, Neville is *such* a Luna line. Great job, my darling! Why must you get me addicted to all these novels??

Jami

I just realized I donít think I commented on your writing. Just the context. I donít know if you need to be told again, but I canít see how you wouldnít like to :) -- youíre writing is, as always, amazing. You create vivid pictures and really inspire me to put more into everything I write. Thank you for that *hug*

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