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Review:Jchrissy says:
Before I start about how amazing this writing style is, I have to get my tiny nitpick out. Harry. You brought Lily to a darker side, a side where she isn't that unwavering loyal person that people think of her as. You brought her into a world where she has the chance to keep the man that she loves, and the man that she made a life with. But, I just feel like you made Harry very out of the picture, and I think Lily loved him above anything else.

You did such an amazing job creating these swirling, chaotic, poetic mix of emotions. The style is flawless. I also really like that I had to pay complete attention and make sure every sentence was read, as to not skip anything important.

This was a very fluid piece, it all fell together just when it should and you seemed to make more important parts stand out, like her jealousy.

She devotes so much energy, so much emotions, into watching him that there are parts where it feels like she's just so close to breaking.

I liked that you had him at the wedding, that seems like a very logical thing he would. The sentence of her sealing his fate with a kiss gave me goose bumps! Serious shudders!

You are an amazing writer, I don't think I'll ever be a shipper for these two, but I loved this story. I loved it because of what a great writer you are. If this was written in third person, if this was written from his PoV, or just without the complete sense of raw emotions breathing so close to the surface, I don't think it would have been near as good.

Something about the way you did this piece is what made it amazing to me, I wish I could further explain exactly what it was, I just can't find the words to. I am very excited to read more of your work!

Jami

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for coming by!

I totally get what you're saying, and you're not the first to point it out. I certainly did not mean to make Harry seem unimportant or expendable to Lily; it was just that the piece wasn't so much focused on him, except in how he related to the Snape/Lily connection here. It's definitely not a general view I have of him!

I'm glad you liked the emotion and the dark turn I took with Lily. I always end up portraying her like this angel, because I really love her, and so I deliberately challenged myself to use Snape's darkness here to bring out the less savory parts of her personality.

I'm so glad you enjoyed this, despite not really being able to ship them, and I really appreciate all of your lovely compliments. Thanks again for this really sweet review :)

-Amanda


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