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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Yes, flirtatious Bill!! :D
He was just perfect, not too much, and not too little. If you'd have spent paragraphs and paragraphs on him, it would be boring, but only a glimpse was not enough. What you wrote was just right!
When you spoke of Fleur's waitress job and then went right back in to her job at Gringott's, I felt like there was something missing. Not a HUGE something, but enough to be slightly befuddling to me.
Again, the suspense builds with the brilliantly-added newspaper article, but I feel like the last sentence is a bit choppy after the action that it follows.
I must stop writing this review now... The rest of your story is calling my name!

Author's Response: Now don't tell anyone, since it'll make them wonder why I don't update faster, but flirtatious Bill is the absolute bee's knees to write XD I'm so glad that you found him easy to read, because I love writing him like that so much and really wouldn't want him to be boring - I do often find myself rambling for paragraphs and often need to remind myself to demonstrate it instead :P

Yeah, I did have trouble switching from one job to another, since it felt clunky at the time but I couldn't work out how to smooth the transition over more :/ Thanks for pointing it out!

Yay, I'm glad you liked the little add of canon - I want to set the scene a bit more for the war, but don't want to make it seem to random. And thanks for the point on the last sentence - it's hard to keep it suspenseful and not clunky :P

Thank you for such a lovely review! :D

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