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Review:firefly910 says:
Oh Sev.

That statement is how I sum up this chapter.

Firstly, I am glad Beth isn't going to reply to her parents. If she really is going to become a fully fledged Order member, she is going to have to break away from them and forge her own path. She knows they aren't going to approve of what she is planning on doing, so what exactly is the point in them knowing? I mean granted they are her parents but they haven't exactly been model parents have they? Beth is a strong girl, she can cope without them.

And now onto Severus.

I like the fact you gave him the slight upper hand in this chapter. It is clear his Mulciber isn't used to feeling inferior to people and introducing Snape's knowledge of the patronus charm portrayed that perfectly.

I always wondered whether Snape showed anyone the spells he created. You write him as hesitant to show his creations to people and I think that at first maybe he wouldn't have wanted to share. But what about later on when they were Death Eaters? Could he have unveiled them as a way to get more recognition? I say this because it is clear that, that is the reason Snape is so interested in the whole blood purity thing, he doesn't really want power, he wants someone to say to him 'eh, you know what you're actually a clever wizard'. It is a little sad that he had to go to the lengths he did to get that recognition.


OH HE THINKS BETH HAS SWITCHED SIDES.
He is such a naive person. You are right he does have a one track mind. Its like if he thinks something is right and he thinks it hard enough then it will actually be right. He is going to be seriously disappointed when he learns that she's in the Order.

Author's Response: That statement is pretty much how I sum up this story. :D And I think you're spot-on where Beth's parents are concerned; they really aren't very good parents (and that does happen -- not everyone's parents are /fit/), and the Order is something for her and her alone. Although her mother does make at least one appearance in the sequel, if you're curious. :3

I think you're also very right about his wanting recognition more than anything. Snape's spells also play a (somewhat minor) part in the sequel, so there's that, as well. :3 Someone once left me a review on this story and said it felt more like an introduction than a book on its own, and while I don't think they meant it as a compliment, I'm taking it as one, because it's very true. :D Beth's story wouldn't be much of a story if it ended here, and this is meant to lead right into a sequel without any (or hardly any) resolutions.

But I suppose you didn't need that lecture from me, did you? :3 YEAH, HE THOUGHT BETH SWITCHED SIDES. Sometimes he is so -- well, to use your word, naive. Bless him. But thank you so much for dropping back by and finishing this today! That's so awesome, and I'm just really, really grateful to you for doing so! ♥

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