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Review:academica says:
Hello! I'm here from Review Tag :)

I think Bill and Fleur are a really sweet couple, having written them once myself, and I liked how you portrayed both of them. Namely, I liked how you included details from the conflict between Fleur and Molly and the scene where Fleur is defending her decision to stay with Bill even after his attack. That always struck me as one of the most romantic moments in the series (though it was partly because of the similar Remus/Tonks bit afterwards), and I think it's really interesting.

I did have a few little critiques, so I hope you don't mind :) One is that this seemed to get a little rambly toward the end, and I found myself skipping over portions of the dialogue. For instance, I felt like the scene that took place after Fred's burial could have been its own separate one-shot, and since it didn't really directly deal with the relationship between Bill and Fleur, I was a little confused as to why you included it. The other thing is the ending - I would have liked to see us return to the present for a loving moment between Bill and Fleur. It just ended a little abruptly for my taste.

I thought the imagery you used was nice, especially in the beginning, and I thought the flow within most of the subsections was nice, too. I didn't notice very many technical errors either, so that's great. Good luck with the challenge!

-Amanda

Author's Response: I never mind critiques! Those are the only way I can get better!!!

Okay, I am going to look over that scene again (blame Dan (CambAngst) for talking me into lengthening it ;). But I have grown pretty attached to it, so I'm not sure I can make any promises...

I was hoping to show some of the struggle their relationship had to endure, and how being part of the marriage that Fleur joined, they were just as much her struggles as his. BUT the fact that you found yourself skipping over portions tells me I definitely need to read it over and rethink.

I am happy you enjoyed most of it, thank you so much for the detailed review! If I can get Lily and James to shut up about chapter 5 of their story, I will look over the things you pointed.

Thank you so much!!


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