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Review:Remus says:
Hey! So sorry that it has taken me a while to get to your story. Work, food and Once Upon a Time got in the way. Hahaha.

I'm a sucker for Bill/Fleur stories so I chose this one.

Your imagery, setting, narrative are amazing! I could picture everything that was going on. Which is what I like because I hate it when authors just ignore that and I imagine the characters in a black room just talking.

Fleur's dialect is great. People trying to do the whole French accent either over do it, or don't do it at all. You managed to capture the balance between her English and French very well considering that it's very hard to put into writing.

Fleur using dark magic here is great. I've always figured anyone would turn to the 'dark side' when their family is in danger. I know I would, honestly. Harry tried (but failed) but even he dabbled in the dark arts out of grief.

In the sentence "especially not marks of your bravery, will bring you away for me." Wouldn't that be 'take you away from me'?

You've seriously made me cry when they were remembering everyone that died. Just the dialogue is perfect that it felt very real. George talking about Fred...man that's when the tears began. Haha, honestly, I've never forgiven JKR for killing Fred. It should've been Percy.

Grammar, plot, and everything about it was great. You're good at putting emotions into words which very few people manage to do when writing fanfiction. It was definitely sad at the beginning but with a happy ending.

Thanks for the great read! :D

--Perelandra

Author's Response: Ahhh I'm getting so many mixed reviews on both the accent and the grieving! I needed your positive words regarding them both, thank you so much!

I am with you on the, it should have been Percy. That would have been sad without the devastation.

The 'will bring you away from me' sentence was worded that way to kind of show her difficulty with English, no good? Confusing? I'll look at it tonight and either change it or seriously debate changing it.

Thank you for your wonderful review, and I'm happy you enjoyed my story!


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