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Review:caoty says:
First of all, I love love love your Fleur. I want to be her best friend, honestly. She's awesome, and Bill's line about her, 'this misunderstood, spoiled, conceited, caring and selfless woman', is fantastic and just so very true.

There were a fair few typos here and there, and I'm not sure Fleur's accent was that strong in canon (though for the life of me I can't remember). The funeral scene could have been developed a little more, too; I'd have liked to hear about the DA and Hermione's parents, because they're only touched on in canon. That said, I liked George's speech, and had newfound respect for him after it.

Also, I love happy endings, I really do, and that last sentence just made me smile. :3

Overall, this was a story of great and well-written emotion, loss and hope, and although it sounds cliched the power of love. Well done, especially for portraying it so well in a pairing that doesn't get enough love.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I really love Fleur, I am with you on wanting to be her best friend! We can be 'the three best friends that anyone ever had' umm..if you haven't seen The Hangover, ignore that last line. haha!

So, I actually edited it this morning and added more to the grieving scene, did a fine tune through it to try and get rid of all the typos, and added a Fleur and Molly scene. I just went back and copied a sentence from it, for you, because it is my new favorite one that Fleur says in this one shot, and I thought it would make you smile ;) -


"Well, I zink it is time for me to go get married," she placed the borrowed crown on top of her head and glanced back into the mirror, "at least my tears did nothing to my face, I still look beautiful."

I also took out some of the accents. I read all of her dialogue in the books, and she does use all the ones I had, but never together that much. So hopefully I smoothed it out a bit.


Your review made my night, thank you so much! I hope you'll check out the new version in... 6 days ;)!


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