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Review:caoty says:
Bonjour, here from the common room thread~

Overall, I felt that your characterisation in particular was excellent. Harry's morally ambiguous actions, and talking to Doge about them, could have gone horribly wrong, but you manage to pull it off without making Harry OOC. Even the characters who don't feature so much in this story, like Ginny and Ron, really do sound and feel like their canon selves, which is fantastic. (I can't do that. I have to cheat by writing Next-Gen and saying that they don't sound like themselves because of prior character development.)

I also really liked the going into detail of the effects of the Elder Wand on Harry. It makes it easier to understand why he got rid of it in DH; before reading this, I just thought he got rid of it 'cause it wasn't the wand he loved and cherished and so on.

However - did catch a few typos:
-"My complements to your tailor" should be "My compliments to your tailor"
-'apparition' should be capitalised
-I doubt they'd refer to Riddle as 'Tom' in court
-"Wizarding Britian" should be "Wizarding Britain"
-"Beaubatons" should be "Beauxbatons"
-Units of wizarding money are generally capitalised, I think, maybe I'm wrong about this (so 'Galleons' instead of 'galleons')
-I think someone else mentioned that 'patronus' is capitalised
-'“It was Oak. Sixteen inches, biggest one Olivander ever made,” Hagrid said thoughtfully.' - oak is not capitalised, Ollivander has two ls.

Sorry for being so pedantic, but I figured it'd be best if you knew. :P

Apart from that, though, it's brilliant - an original idea brought to life using canon style. Well done. :)

Author's Response: Hello, fellow Gryffie!

I'm really glad you liked the characterization. It's very important to me, because I try my best to maintain and grow the characters from the way I recall them from the books. It's odd. I started out planning to write a Hagrid story and ended up with more of a Harry story. Doge seemed like a good character to use as a confidant, since he apparently played that role for Dumbledore, as well.

The part with the Elder Wand is something that I still may edit out someday, because I'm not sure how well it fits with the rest of the story. Nevertheless, I'm glad you liked it.

Thanks for all of the typos and other issues you pointed out. I'll go back and take a look at them. Don't worry about being pedantic. It can only make the story better.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I was able to tag you back and read your one-shot story, which I thought was brilliant.

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