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Review:Aether says:
Beautiful one-shot. The description here is just fantastic! It really put me in the mindset of where Remus is, mentally. I thought there could have been more description of setting mixed in with Remus's thoughts. But I can see that maybe a lack of setting pulls the reader closer to Remus's mindset - he is lost in his thoughts and memories of Sirius and out of contact with the world around him.

The flow is great! I love how I was able to read straight through, without stopping. Remus's emotion was believable, as was his character. I feel that all AU ships require a certain amount of suspension of disbelief, especially when it involves changing a character's sexuality. However, I think you wrote this well. I don't think that, short of providing several chapters with a long, winding backstory, you could make Remus's relationship with Sirius more believable. For a one-shot, I could definitely feel Remus's relationship with Sirius was real. Great job! I really enjoyed this one-shot.

Aether

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you for coming by, and I apologize that my response has taken a little while.

I can see where you're coming from about the setting. Sometimes I find that my imagery just flows in a stream of consciousness fashion, such that I really don't know where it's taking me, but I probably could have focused it in a little more on the actual house. I'm glad you still found it effective, though.

It's great that you found the relationship and emotions believable and that you liked the flow of the story. This is my first time attempting to write this ship, and I really wanted to do it justice, so I appreciate your feedback.

Thanks again for your very kind review :)

-Amanda


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