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Review:academica says:
Hey Susan! I've been meaning to come by and check this out for a while, so you know I'm taking my chance now that summer has arrived at last ♥

This is so interesting already! I'm hooked by so many things, not only the ending but the little details about Lily and her family that I'm just starting to find out about. I'm intrigued by Lily's injury, and I'm looking forward to learning more about how she received it and just how much it complicates her life. I'm also really pleased to read a story about the Potter children with no mention of the Weasleys, aside from Aunt Hermione. Too often I read next-gen pieces that give me the impression that the Potters and Weasleys cannot be separated in the minds of many authors, so this is so refreshing. It's also nice to see the focus switched onto Neville and Hannah, even just as far as using them to set the background of the story.

As always, your imagery is beautiful, and the chapter flowed without much effort for me. I'm really intrigued by the ring and its inscription, and I have my ideas about what it means, but I guess I'll just have to wait and see what befalls Lily next. I felt like this chapter was perfect in terms of length, too, seeing as it held my interest and left me wanting more without flooding me with details. It can be hard to get that initial chapter right, and Susan, you've done it! Pat yourself on the back!

Nicely done :)

-Amanda
Recenseo 2012

Author's Response: This is a great surprise! Thank you very much for coming to check out this story - I really hope that you enjoy reading it and look forward to hearing what you think. ^_^

At first, not including the Weasleys was a matter of convenience because I didn't want a large cast of characters getting in the way. I did think about using Rose at some point, but then I replaced her because it's nice, for once, to not include all of those cousins. Even Lily's brothers don't appear in this story, emphasizing her isolation from the world. She sees only the older generation, those with access to that mysterious past. I'd never thought of my cast choices in this way before, but now I'm intrigued by what it signifies for Lily. She's divided from her siblings and cousins - her physical disability marks her as different, and so she even changes her hair colour to further that difference. And I wonder whether being one of the youngest cousins also made her want to differentiate herself more so that she would have more of an individual identity. I've got to think this idea through a bit more, but it's an interesting thing to note and I'm glad that you brought it up. :)

There was a time when I thought that this first chapter would need some neatening up because it was my own introduction to the story and the character, so there was some... rooting around (is that the right way of describing it?) for the right style, etc. But a later chapter changed my mind. ;) It's great that you like this first chapter and it helps make me feel more confident about it, too!

Thank you very much for your compliments! *blushes* It means a lot to hear that you like my writing. ^_^


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