Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Hi there!

I am here with your review request.

I really liked the story. I thought it was wonderfully written and that the characters and ship you were writing about worked well and were believable. At first when I read this I was confused about the Dante's fated lovers bit, but then I got to the end and saw your note. Makes sense now, but not knowing about it before made it a bit confusing for me.

I thought the characterization was well done. I liked seeing Remus like this. Even though it is a pained feeling it is also reflective. It brought out the emotions really well. I also thought that the description was powerful and well done in a way that doesn't overwhelm the story line.

The flow of the story was smooth. I didn't see anything that caused confusion between the transitions. The imagery that you used in the story was really mind evoking. I really enjoyed how it brought to life Remus' thoughts and feelings towards everyone in his life.

Overall, I thought that the story was brilliant. You did a wonderful job characterizing Remus. The other characters played more of a subtle role, but contributed well in the story line itself. The description was beautiful and well balanced. I loved the imagery. I didn't see anything in this story that I didn't truly like. I did find your reference confusing at first, but that is more than likely me and not the story.

Keep up the awesome writing! =)

Thanks for requesting and I hope that this is somewhat helpful.

-SR17

Recenseo 2012

Author's Response: Hello! I appreciate you coming by, and I apologize that my response has taken a while.

I'm sorry the fated lovers comment confused you. I always wonder if I should put an author's note at the beginning or end of a chapter, and while they usually wind up at the end, maybe this would have been a good case to put it at the beginning. Thanks for letting me know, and I'm glad the explanation helped you grasp the idea a bit better. (I sometimes forget that not everyone is as big a fan of Dante as I am! Haha.)

I'm really glad that the imagery and emotion worked for you and didn't seem too overpowering. This piece was very challenging for me, and I really enjoyed writing it, but I was worried at times that I was pushing it too hard, so it's great that you didn't feel that. I'm also happy that the flow worked okay - whenever I do breaks in a story, I wonder if the action has been interrupted awkwardly, and so I'm pleased that you found it smooth.

Thanks so much for your very kind review :)

-Amanda


Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 487
Submit Report: