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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums here to review for you! :D So, let's go over things:

First of all...just, wow. I think this was absolutely beautifully written. You did a terrific job. We'll go over individual parts now, okay?

Characterization: I loved how you portrayed Remus. I think he was just the right mix of hope and despair. He was so lost, and I think that's an essential part of his character that people tend to forget. Great job.

Descriptions: Your imagery was absolutely gorgeous. I reread some parts just to revel in it. Your descriptions were so wonderful. They really, REALLY brought the story to life. I always know when I'm in-tune with a story when the voice in my head reads in a certain tone, and this was one of those times. Great job.

Emotions: Well, I mentioned this in the "descriptions" category, but I'll talk about it again--GREAT job. Seriously (no pun intended), I could feel the love that Remus had for Sirius and how conflicted he felt. His pain was very realistic. I think you wrote it wonderfully.

Style: Your writing-style in and of itself is great. I think it was perfect for the story you were trying to tell. You grabbed an idea and pulled it into yourself and really, really brought it to life through your stylistic choices. I applaud you.

Flow: I think this was also quite wonderful. There were a couple of times where I had to re-read to figure out where we were/what was happening, but I figured it out eventually. If you want to read through the story, maybe you can spot those few places that need clarification, but even if you don't, the story works well.

Again, great job. You really made the ship believable. I liked it a lot. :D

--Emily

Author's Response: Hi Emily! Thanks for coming by, and I apologize that my response took so long. I really appreciate you leaving such a detailed and well-organized review :)

I can only take so much credit for the characterization, because Remus was inspired heavily by the author for whom I wrote this. Her Remus is so perfect, and if mine is even a shadow of that, I'm incredibly flattered. I've thought about trying my hand at her Sirius as well, when I get some time and some nerve!

I'm also happy that the description and emotion worked well for you. I haven't always believed in this ship, and it's not one of my top ones, so I felt like I had to work hard to make it believable for me. (Again, forsakenphoenix does this effortlessly.)

I'm sorry some places were confusing for you, but I'm very glad you liked the piece as a whole. Thanks so much for your very kind review! :)

-Amanda


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