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Review:dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap says:
His father made to pick up the other end of his trunk, but Lily got there first. "I've got it," she said cheerfully.

^ Aw. Lily. How cute.

I like the story, seeing the interaction between the two of them is great to contrast with how they act now because this is a companion piece. I think the only thing I would say is I found it a bit boring, a bit repetitive. I know that's what you're going for (not the boring part, the repetitive thing) because it's supposed to focus solely on the train ride but then again I like that nothing really happened and it was realistic compared to what many others do for the train rides. I guess I'm half and half with this chapter.

I think my favorite character is Noah though. I have a new appreciation for him!

Author's Response: I love Lily. She's so much fun to write. I also really like the relationship (my) Lily has with (my) Scorpius - they have a nice little friendship, I think. :P

I definitely know what you mean about it being repetitive - I struggled with that a bit, and I'm still not quite sure what to do about it. :( Hmm.

I'm glad you like Noah! I love Noah. He's one of my favourite OCs, along with Van.

Thank you so much. ♥


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