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Review:apocalypse says:
Hey! This is apocalypse, here to review your challenge entry!

Firstly, I'm really sorry for taking so long to coming here. I'd kinda gotten involved in other activities.

Anyway, now that I'm here, I'll just start with your review.

I think that this is a pretty well-written story! You've done a very good job with the emotions and the descriptions of the feelings through out the chapter and I really enjoyed your writing. A very good job there! I suppose the best part of your story was definitely your description. It was to the point, precise and detailed enough to allow me to picture the scenarios; it wasn't over indulgent which was, in my opinion, the best part of it all.

Also, the scene that you chose for Luna. This may sound weird seeing as I was the challenge setter but I had not been expecting this particular scene to be chosen. I know, very thoughtless of me, but I think that that's good. You were able to surprise me with it and I loved reading it. Even when this was very sad, I don't think that you could've written it in any better form. Great job! =)

Generally, this was very very sad. The way she had been recalling how she spent her day and had noticed that her mother hadn't been up when she should've been, that was something that just got to me. I've always liked Luna and have always had a soft spot for her as she didn't have her mother and to see her situation being written so realistically like this, (as realistic as it can get in fan fiction), it was amazing. I loved every bit of the entire thing.

The only issue I had, and that's not really a big one, but I thought I should tell you that there were some points that made it hard for me to believe that they were the thoughts of a nine-year-old girl. Overall, it was believable but when you look at some specific parts (which I can't really pinpoint but there were occasions) I think I missed her innocence. The cute little thoughts that a young child has, those were there but barely. I guess I had expected/wanted more of that. Anyway, that's only a small thing and doesn't really matter much when we look at it overall. It was wonderfully done and I really liked the emotions that you wrote. Very good job! =)

Thank you SO much for entering my challenge! =)

P.S. As there were only five entries for my challenge, I've decided to only announce one winner. I hope that that's okay with you. =) PM me if there's anything you'd like to say. =)

Author's Response: Hello,

I'm glad to hear from you. I'm actually very happy that you appreciated the story. I had qualms about writing a nine-year-old girl, especially Luna, and her innocence. But I always knew Luna was a great character, a bit more wiser than any of the characters in HP, with perhaps Dumbledore and Snape only the ones I had great esteem about their knowledge being more than hers.

I am very happy to know that you liked this. I love Luna to bits that I'm afraid I didn't give justice to her. I have to be honest that this scene was the first thing that entered my mind when I received Luna to be my main character. It was challenging, and very much fun to do, except I cried more than enough times while writing.

I'm happy to make you happy. :) Thank you.

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