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Review:academica says:
Hi Pix! I'm here with your requested review :) First off, I'm sorry I haven't come by to check this out before now. School got really crazy in the last month or so, and it was nice to see you post in my thread and remind me to stop by this story. At first glance, this looks like quite the deviation from Snorcas, and I'm excited to explore your versatility as an author with you.

This chapter was positively adorable. Your characterization stood out to me as being particularly brilliant -- this doesn't seem quite like Fred and George from canon, more like they have a tinge more reserve than we're used to seeing, but it still feels like a very true characterization. I love that you can already feel a slight difference in their personalities even at the age of six, and yet it also feels like a very natural brotherly relationship as far as the smoothness with which the two of them interact. It's twin-like, but not too cliche. I also think you did Percy and Charlie perfectly, even with just a brief mention of each.

The chapter definitely flowed well for me, and I imagine that the other chapters are just as cute. It was neat to think about Fred being so enthralled with whipped topping, and I can see small glimpses of his father's fascination with Muggle objects, which I liked. Speaking of the whipped cream moment, I thought the imagery there was nice, very wholesome. It's impressive to see that you can write the lighter and darker subject matter with equal grace.

I'm thinking that you might have been hoping for more critique, but I really don't notice anything to be improved in this chapter. I suppose I could make things up, but then it would be harder to say 'hope this was helpful' at the end, and... okay, rambling now. Suffice it to say, I really enjoyed this, and you're certainly free to re-request for the other chapters, though I still might get to them on my own.

Nicely done! (I at least hope this was nice to read.)

-Amanda

Author's Response: It's academica!

This was my palate cleanser from Snorcas. (can we say "totally different"?) Sometimes you just have to break free...

Aww, you can make things up if you have to. ;) Just kidding! I'm so happy you enjoyed reading this. It was really fun to write... all wholesome and happy... I did have to think about Fred and George and what kind of recognizable personality traits they would inherently have, as opposed to the traits they would have developed over time. It can be a mind bender.

Your review was such a very nice read and I will definitely re-request for the next chapter!

Thanks so much!

pix

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