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Review:MagicalInk says:
Hello!

I just started reading this, so that's why I didn't review any of the chapters before. Anyways, I'm enjoying this story and I specially liked this chapter.

First of all, because the first chapter clearly introduced me to Jane's life and character. I could feel her paranoia taking on me a bit, and I like that it isn't set during Hogwarts.

Then, because I found the second chap lacking of...action? Like, I feel like her suspicions went down, as I'd have doubted much more before telling Reagan and at Remus' behave. That could be fixed though, with some more descriptions of angst, and maybe even mentioning a high stress at a knock on the door or a neighbor arriving home.

Now, on this chapter, I got the angst back though not much, probably because of the second one. I liked that the Ministry is suddenly irrupting in the hospital's activities and that everyone is reacting differently: every reaction provoking different suspicions. It was interesting reading about people denying the fact that there was a war, it made it more realistic, and also enjoyed Jane's reaction to their ignorance.

Overall, characterization is going well, and I'm loving the flow. The plotline is getting more interesting and intriguing, and I can't wait till next chapter!
Wonderful job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I really appreciate your feedback, and I definitely know what you mean about the second chapter. I'm still not completely happy with it, so I'm definitely going to go back to it to tweak it a bit and add in some more things. :)

Thanks again, and I hope you continue to like the story! Chapter 4 should be up soon. :)


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