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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Hi there again!

Well I think that you are two for two here already.

This chapter was chocked-full of great description. The tapping of the owl, the way she felt uncomfortable about talking with Reagan as she did. I get that sense of foreboding. I am terrified that she said more than what she should have as well. Especially since we know that not many people could be trusted through this time period. The little snippets of details like her sitting, curled up in her favorite chair may seem like they are meaningless, but in reality they give us more insight than ever. I really enjoy the natural way that they fit into the chapter. Or when you talk about the Daily Prophet and mention the headlines. They are a great look into the mood that you are trying to set for the story.

You did a great job with making her emotions come clear through the entire chapter. I could feel her anxiety build, her happiness of Lily's letter, her frustration/sadness with Remus's letter. I thought that Lily was a bit of a comic relief that helped balance out the darkness of the chapter.

Reagan made me feel quite uneasy. I think it is her character and the fact that this is more of an angsty type chapter for Jane.

Overall, I am still jealous! ;) Your description continues to paint a masterpiece of work in this chapter. I thought the emotions were very clear and brought out the mood of the chapter quite well. I am still intrigued at what else is going to happen.

Keep up the superb work!! =)

-SR17

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Like I said in my last response, I'm really glad that this level of description worked for you - I didn't want to slow the story down by describing everything in a lot of detail, but I did want to give the reader a decent picture of the scene and Jane's feelings. Knowing that I reached a happy medium is really reassuring, especially now that I'm working on chapter 4.

Thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it. :)


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