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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi! Maggie here with your review! Thanks so much for requesting :)

Wow, what can I say that all your other reviewers haven't already said? This is just beautiful--your imagery and sensory details are crystal-clear and vivid. I especially love Ron's description of the Burrow: "hurriedly added bedrooms and people coming and going with equal amounts of love and welcome..." It just made me smile :)

And when I realized that the italicized parts were in Hermione's voice! That just adds so much to the story; it was completely unexpected, and a lovely suprise for me :) I was pretty confused the first time you switched from Ron to Hermione (because I didn't actually realize that's what was happening), but the next time it was perfectly clear.

The only concrit I can offer is that every now and then you change from present to past tense, like in the first italicized paragraph. That did cause a little confusion for me. But that's incredibly nit-picky, and it's literally the only bump in the otherwise graceful flow of this piece :)

Again, thank you so much for sharing this with me! I'm so glad I read it...it's just gorgeous! I think it's safe to say you pulled this experiment off really well. And I love the closing lines! :)

--Maggie

Author's Response: Thank YOU for coming by so quickly, and leaving me such lovely compliments! :) I'm really pleased you liked this, too -- it's currently one of my favorite things I've written. What can I say? :P

I don't like telling people at the onset that the italicized voice is Hermione's; it might be a bit confusing, but I think it's always realized eventually. ;) And I'm kind of striving for that bit of confusion, anyway. But I'm glad you liked it!

As for the tense switching, that was done on purpose. ;) Hermione is walking through the lane, reflecting on the subway train she'd just ridden, so that's why it's as it is.

I'm so happy you liked this -- thanks for such a great review! ♥ It really made my day to get it! (And I'm very sorry for the long wait for the response!)

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