|Review:||Indigo Seas says:|
I thought I would repay the favor, because your review was just so spectacular. I can't exactly measure up to feedback like that, but seeing your name on the Recently Added list was just too hard to resist.
Firstly, can I just say that your beginnings, in every story that I've read of yours, are magnificent. I think there's certainly careful crafting that goes into each one of them, be it subconscious or not. Either way, your opening lines and phrases, the way you describe the environment, are lovely. This in particular was just... lovely: "Even the sheep kept to their pens, huddling together for warmth, their thick wool steaming." Now, that doesn't necessarily conjure up a picture that somebody thinking of their happy place is going to think of, but the imagery you've created is especially powerful. I don't think I've ever read something about the sheep in their pens, their "steaming" wool, and it's delightfully refreshing.
And your flow is completely effortless. So many stories jump from place to place and paragraph to paragraph, and you spin your story so smoothly that I hardly notice the paragraphs passing at all. There are, of course, purposeful interrupters that you've stuck here and there, and they do their job of making the reader pause. It creates a wonderful rhythm, and isn't something that's common in many pieces (partly because, I think, it's very difficult to manage).
I'll just say it's lovely once more before I start rambling (more than I already have, anyway). Your writing and sense of style is absolutely superb, and I'm extremely jealous of your massive amounts of talent.
Author's Response: Oh Rin, you didn't have to! This story is nowhere near the quality of yours, making your praise of this a million times more amazing. Thank you very much for taking the time to check out this story! :D
I'm very glad to hear that you liked it, particularly its style. Because there won't be too much by way of a plot in this story, I chose to place more focus on atmosphere, capturing the style and look of the film noir without having to enter into the confusion of a plot, and film noir plots do get very strange and complex. My goal is to make this story "look" like a carefully-made film, including many of the technical elements that will hopefully translate well into people's minds as they read - I hope that they can "see" the story as well as I can. :D It's more fun to write the imagery, anyway, and it's wonderful to hear that it stood out to you. I want to pay a lot of attention to detail in this story because there will be a trick in it and I'm interested to see how many readers will pick up on it. ;)
Thank you so much for your compliments! Re-reading them now, I'm made speechless - it means a lot to hear you say these things and I hope that, once I write the rest of the story, that you'll enjoy that too. ^_^