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Review:SunshineDaisies says:
Hello, hello!

Another short chapter, but I think you're back on par with it.

The thing that struck me most about this chapter is how Brienne was was in good spirits for most of the chapter, and then, after a particularly good night, she crawled up into her bed and started crying. That is so completely accurate.

The rest of the chapter was just as good. I liked the introduction of the chasers, and I thought you did a good job with their personalities. I might have preferred to see a little more development of Fred, George, and Brienne, but that's okay.

One thing I did notice was the way you describe facial expressions. It's effective, but I think actually describing the raised eyebrows, narrowed eyes, and positions of the mouth make it slightly more interesting to read.

I think that's it! I'm excited to read more! :)

Author's Response: Hi! I'm glad you liked this one! I'm glad you think my writing appears realistic, that's what I strive for :) I'll try and work in some more development in there, thanks for pointing it out, and reviewing!

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