And we're back, for prize review #3, challenge winner :)
"I'm okay right now" -- Haha, I love awkward Albus. I like him, and I've seen him written a lot of different ways, but I think this one is especially believable (especially considering that... erm... unique name his father chose for him). It's very interesting that you made him a redhead! Cute. And I love that he's friends with Scorpius. It seems to be a bit cliche (granted, I don't read much next gen, so who knows really), but it's a cliche I like, and I think it sort of makes sense.
Speaking of Scorpius, I love that he's cool and witty, and I love that Rose is as fiery as her hair, the way that so (read: too many, for my taste) many people write Ginny. You've taken my characterizations and written them, and now I see that I'm not crazy, they really do work well. So there. I'm not all that into Rose/Scorpius, but their snark works together beautifully here. I nearly snorted out loud at the dialogue.
This was just so cute, and I really enjoyed seeing Albus floundering in all of his ridiculous excuses. I like the message you're sending, too -- you don't need to make excuses, just be who you are and say what you feel and everybody will just have to respect that and leave it alone. The ending was a little abrupt for my taste, but otherwise, this flowed wonderfully and was lovely from start to finish.
Great job! I really should spend more time over here. You're very talented and you definitely deserved to win my challenge. I hope you enjoy all of your prize reviews :)
Author's Response: Oh, I am so, so glad you like this! I actually had this sitting around on my hard drive for awhile but I was a little unsure about it, so I never got around to posting it. Having you tell me that you like it makes me feel a lot more confident. :)
Albus really can be written a lot of ways, can't he? When I started writing him (which was actually in Curiosity is Not a Sin, my first fic ever), I'd read enough Rose/Scorpius fics to know that generally, either Albus and Scorpius are in Slytherin together and are best friends, or Albus is in Gryffindor and they hate each other. I always saw Albus as a Gryffindor without a manipulative bone in his body (who was nearly hatstalled because of his Hufflepuff tendencies), but I also always saw him as someone who was almost relentlessly openminded and accepting. (In part because I knew I wanted Rose, James, and Roxanne to be the opposite.) So I split the difference, because Albus and Scorpius being friends is a cliche I like, too. :P I'm really pleased that it worked for you.
I am also really, really glad that you liked Scorpius - you are one of my two favourite Slytherins on the site, so your opinion of my Slytherin characters means a lot to me. (Also in general, but you knew that.) Scorpius is one of the next-gens I think I've done the best job with, so when people like him, I always feel very happy. (Also, I love writing him, so he keeps finding his way into stories that aren't actually about him.)
(I am also happy that you like Rose, of course.)
I definitely know what you mean about the ending - when I get a chance, I'll look it over and try to smooth it out a little.
I am so sorry it's taken me so long to answer this. Thank you for your reviews. You are awesome.