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Review:academica says:
Hi! Thanks for the swap :)

Ooh, neat! A very intriguing beginning. I can see hints of Jack Sparrow, Sherlock Holmes and others in Tristan, and I already like his devil-may-care characterization, though of course it will be helpful if more depth is added to him later on in the tale.

As for critique, the action here did seem to go a bit fast, and I think you could have benefited from a bit more description. I think you could paint the scene a little without giving away too much of the plot if you're careful, just to make the reader feel more involved in the story and relate to your character.

Great job! :)

Amanda

Author's Response: I think hints of Jack and Sherlock were happy coincidences. I never planned Tristan to be like them, but I have no doubt they were on my mind, being two of my favorite people. And Tristan is awesome like them. :P

You will know more about Tristan as the story continues, definitely. His whole "mission" is based on his past. :)

I must say, I tend to avoid action because I'm terrible. LOL. Thank you for the critique.

Sam.


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