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Review:Manga_girl says:
Sam! Here I am for your requested review!

So far, I really like how you're going to go with your plot. Judging by this and the summary, it sounds like it is going to be great! The idea is original and very entertaining!

First of all, I'll talk about characterisation. How about we start with Jacob/Tristan? I'm going to call him Tristan to save time. Anyway, I think he is written really well. I can imagine him being a bad boy. So far, he certainly is not a Gary-Stu as he has lots of faults but just in case, I would avoid making him too much of a heart-throb-bad-boy. I don't think you are going that way with him but I just thought I'd point it out.

I really want to see where you go with him as he seems like such an interesting character.

I really like how you wrote this in general. It is really short but I think the length works well with this as it add's effect and makes the reader want to go onto the next chapter.

I did not spot any spelling/grammar mistakes which is good. Also, this flows really well. I didn't find any big interruptions and each part glided perfectly into the next.

I really like your writers style. You wrote this so well and the description is lovely! You chose your words really well. I wish every story I read could be as good as this! Well done,

Emma xx

Author's Response: Tristan is what he'll be called most of the way through, so you calling him that is fine. Knowing me, I'd probably get confused if you called him anything else. LOL.

He has a lot of faults, definitely. And you're right; I don't intend on making him a heart-throb-bad-boy. Girls are really not on his mind, they're just there.

Thank you, Emma!

Sam.


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